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翡翠:heart:

(my first entry into the #minimalit group! :^D Conforming to the group's 3 word maximum. :nod:)
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Daily Deviation

Given 2013-04-02
senryu of homecoming by `RetroZombie tells the joy and relief of a nighttime reunion, all with just three words, says the anonymous suggester. ( Featured by Nichrysalis )
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hopeburnsblue Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2015  Professional Writer

Hello! :wave: Your haiku has been featured on Multhaiku's Twitter page at @GenreHaiku! Please follow us for more great haiku and micropoetry! :iconheartblueplz:

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Astrikos Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2013   General Artist
You were featured here :love:
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RetroZombie Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2013
Thank you for the thought... but I don't see my piece listed... :blushes:
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Astrikos Featured By Owner Aug 8, 2013   General Artist
That's weird. It was up there. Sta sh ruined the article the first time I hit done.
I'll fix it soon!D:
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Karinta Featured By Owner May 31, 2013  Student General Artist
Three words? Fantastic.
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Medoriko Featured By Owner May 10, 2013  Student Writer
So little words yet holds such a large meaning. Beautiful :heart:
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ryanisnasty Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2013
I really love poems like this.
Most poems need a bunch of words to get the meaning across, but with these the writer gets it in 3 words and simply perfects it.
I love this, it is perfection at it's best.
Congratulations on the Daily Deviation
:huggle:
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RetroZombie Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2013
Thank you! I'm so glad that you appreciate the power of brevity! :D
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MiSt-Stavi Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2013  Professional Traditional Artist
:clap:
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RetroZombie Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2013
Thank you! :bow:
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cality Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is a lovely piece – congratulations on the DD! Such a lovely image conveyed in just three words. <3
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RetroZombie Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2013
Thank you so much!
This piece holds special meaning, as you might have guessed. :aww:
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cality Featured By Owner Apr 13, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Indeed, I did guess! You're welcome. :)
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synconi Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2013   Artisan Crafter
(I can read Chinese, you know :eyes:)

You can paint such an image with just three little words; I see...alleviation of the day's trouble and worry, peace and utter contentment, balm. So lovely :heart:
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RetroZombie Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2013
(so much for subtlety! :giggle:)

thank you so much—you interpret it exactly as I intended! :aww:
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synconi Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2013   Artisan Crafter
Most welcome! <3
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Is-lnds Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2013
i dont understand

if you take the title
and the poem together

you've got it. its all there.
why the hate? haha

congrats mate.
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RetroZombie Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2013
I'm gratified that most people, like yourself, seem to be able to grasp the point of the piece. Thank you!
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KaitForest Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2013   Writer
i do not understand why you received so much hate for this poem. this genre of poetry exists (haiku/senryu), and it is not uncommon! (maybe to the da world, but i have read many three-two word poems before!) i saw this and i immediately knew this was a well chosen dd for your skill in carefully choosing these words and aligning them together. you have done an amazing, profound job in evoking imagery and feeling with so little. i love it.

and congratulations!
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RetroZombie Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2013
In the early days of computer programming, companies paid programmers by "KLOCs", or thousands of lines of code. It eventually became apparent that people were padding out their programs, and that programmers who could write more efficient algorithms in fewer lines were being penalized.

The moral being that less is often more. :D

Thank you so much for this wonderful comment, and I'm grateful to you and others who recognize the challenge of expressing as much as possible in the smallest space.
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Enemom Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
THIS DOESN'T DESERVE A DD!!!! THREE WORDS. THAT'S ALL THIS IS. THREE F---ING WORDS. THAT'S THE DUMBEST S--- I'VE EVER SEEN IN MY LIFE. YOU SIR ARE A DISGRACE TO DEVIANTART. PLEASE LEAVE.
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Concora Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2013   Writer
Pathetic. The writer's not the one being a disgrace to dA, hun.
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neurotype Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I was not aware that artists picked their own DDs now. I wonder what us CVs do. :confused:
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RetroZombie Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2013
FAQ #873: What do I do when I disapprove of a Daily Deviation feature?

(and you have been reported, and blocked)
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FenrirSleeps Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
well...some months ago I saw a 6 word story on DDs and I thought that was the most minimalistic thing they could reward...

hehe...wrong
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DannyAnthony Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
John, this is not hate or judging; I'm sure you're an awesome guy. However, if you believe as I that words paint a picture in the reader's mind, this is as much a poem as one could consider a stick figure a viable portrait. Three words aside, I judge all art by the amount of thought and creativity put into a piece... need I say more here? This 'poem' slaps in the face all poets who actually take time to pen a cohesive, thoughtful poem. I understand and recognize that senryu is a poetry form, yet maybe I should go back and slap a fancy label on that stick figure and call it art. Rest assured, I hold this view on all senryus, haikus, and other such 'poems'. Nevertheless, I'm ranting here; congratulations on the DA, someone obviously appreciated it, even if I don't. I'm sure I'm going to get all sorts of hate messages now, so I will go back to my lair and peacefully wait for them.

Regards, Dan
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Enemom Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I agree!
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TheGalleryOfEve Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Congratulations on your well-deserved DD!!! :iconflyingheartsplz::iconlainloveplz: :iconflyingheartsplz: :clap::clap::clap:
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RetroZombie Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2013
:iconlawooplz: Thank you!
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TheGalleryOfEve Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
You're welcome!!! :iconflyingheartsplz::happybounce::iconflyingheartsplz:
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RedDragonfly Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2013
Fantastic!
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RetroZombie Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2013
Thanks! :dance:
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rlkirkland Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
:sun: Hey a DD; congratulations!
This, a wonderful example of radical brevity. :)
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RetroZombie Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2013
Thank you, Ron! :aww:
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Gryffgirl Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2013
Congratulations on your DD for this beautiful senryu! :clap:
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RetroZombie Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2013
thank you so much! :bow: :dance:
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poetries Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2013
This is absolutely beautiful, John --- a perfect painting in three words. :heart:

Congratulations on your DD!
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RetroZombie Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2013
Thank you, Kera! I have the best inspiration that a poet could ever ask for. :aww:

:hug:
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lintu47 Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
    Congrats on the well deserved DD! :dalove:
    Have a nice day! :heart:
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RetroZombie Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2013
Thank you so much! :XD:
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lintu47 Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
    My pleasure :happybounce:
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vanmall Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Congrats on the Daily Deviation! :happybounce:
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RetroZombie Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2013
Thank you! :iconloopydanceplz:
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neurotype Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Lovely. :D
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RetroZombie Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2013
I'm glad you think so! :aww:
Thank you!
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neurotype Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
No problem!
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lombregrise Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2013  Professional Writer
feat here :rose: [link]
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wordeea Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
perfect
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RetroZombie Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2013
:blush: thank you!
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